TUCKED AMID

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "TUCKED AMID" presents an interesting mix of imagery and metaphor, which offers a rich ground for analysis.

The first two lines utilize vivid imagery to create a scene involving "red-tufted swiftlets" and "undainty coo". The choice of words here is intriguing, as they evoke a sense of the natural world and the creatures within it. However, the use of the term "undainty" might be reconsidered, as it is not a commonly used word and could potentially confuse readers.

The third and fourth lines shift the focus to a figure referred to as "Her" and "Eve". The reference to "Eve" could be interpreted as a biblical allusion, but the context is not entirely clear. The phrase "of musculature" is a bit abstract and could benefit from further development or clarification.

The lines "2 parts water / 1 part to joke with" introduce a new metaphorical element to the poem. This seems to be a reference to a recipe or formula, but it's not clear what this formula is meant to represent. It could be beneficial to provide more context or explanation for this metaphor.

The final line, "And kisses smearingly she spoke with", uses a unique verb - "smearingly" - to describe the act of speaking with kisses. This is a creative choice, but the meaning is somewhat ambiguous. It might be helpful to rephrase or expand on this concept to make the intended meaning clearer.

Overall, the poem has a strong sense of imagery and metaphor, but could benefit from more clarity and context in certain areas.

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forget what AI says about the questioning of the word: (undainty) it does not confuse most readers. At least, that is my point of view.

I like your incarnation of "Eve". She seems more empowered than the biblical version. I find this might be an enigmatic piece to some. I really like it, especially the line:

And kisses smearingly she spoke with

you might want to drop the (And) and use "As" and restructure it into:

(As with kisses, she smearingly spoke) that wood make the line smoother. this is just a suggestion which you may either use or ignore.

Welcome to Neopoet...I am very interested to read more of your work!

welcome to Neo. After Candlewitch commented, I went back to read again with fresh eyes, and saw the meaning.
Nicely done! ~ Geezer.
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