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brittle light

Aug 14, 2017 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Tuesday Night In August

dog day eveningwaning heatmiles' cool jazz frisson feistyelectrifiying thundermagnolia breeze tingles her skimpy dresscheeky kissand giggle blissening my reminiscence ofthat Tuesday nightin August mesmerizing

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: upstate New York USA, USA

Comments

vandiemenspeak

7 years 11 months ago

Jeez, he's done it again.

I think you've found your calling Al.

Bravo. Made me think of Mo' better blues, Blue train, Coltrane, and a night long ago.

My old man, had a copy of Miles' "Straight no chaser" EP and a stack of others, Brubeck and McCrae, "Take Five" sitting in his wardrobe, that being a nosy kid, I found one day, and stuck on his old record player. Well, there's no going back is there?

Blissening, is a great little invention. Love it!

Thanks.

Chris.

brittle light

7 years 11 months ago

many thanks, Chris

most of my favorite moods include a background of moody blue jazz from the 60's
mostly Miles Davis ( pre-Bitches Brew)
I'm not an aficionado by any means though. I just like the stuff I am familiar with.

i thought "blissening" was my twist , but I looked it up on google, and there it was

thanks again for your remarks

lovedly

7 years 11 months ago

taking your words for my 100 words poetic dictionary Sir Poet

frisson
feisty
tingles
skimpy
blissening
reminiscence
mesmerizing

Frisson ...jess used it in my poetry in lieu of masturbation I think/recall
mesmerizing... a gal said about my smiling poetry...about her features
AND
on the beach the other day
I felt like your August day today
15 Aug 2017
skimpy gals wearing almost nothing
invisible she's
blinding me
Thanks
bright light to thee

brittle light

7 years 11 months ago

thank you Luv (In my

thank you Luv (In my imitation British accent)

stay feisty

sincerly,

lovedly

7 years 11 months ago

coinedness

your LUV I can hear
such a beautiful accent
we all LUV to endear
Thank you
hope you do hear

from frisson
you take me to
friesty
luvli

Eumolpus

7 years 11 months ago

cool

minimal
paints a full picture with very few words- sounds, smells, feel of air-
has the wholestory- like a Hopper painting, or by Vermeer.
Like a pencil sketch that with just a few lines becomes a crowded landscape

Like the spacing. And the perfect title, repeated and not a distraction.
nice!

brittle light

7 years 11 months ago

thanks for the gracious

thanks for the gracious remarks
I like this one myself.
nothing bothers me about it. Something, in so many other poems of mine, annoys me
even though I can't put a finger on it, so it is a gratifying when one works to my satisfation

thanks again ,Mark

p.s. If you feel comfortable enough, you can call me Al. Most everyone does, after awhile

scribbler

7 years 11 months ago

Hi Al

This would be worth reading just to see the word "blissening" lol. But the rest of this is pretty entertaining as well.........stan

brittle light

7 years 11 months ago

Stan

I liked that word too
and it is also useful, utilitarian
why did it take so long to discover

hope you can find a place for it too