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Sep 02, 2022
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Twenty-One At Seventeen
By the time I was seventeen I was twenty-one
If you were to judge me on what I had done
Drinking and drugs and worse things
Flying high without having any wings
Crumbling like dirt into the ground
Spiraling further and further down
Buried beneath depression to never escape
I found the truth after it was too late
Needles and blades in my skin deep
What I continuously sewed I did reap
Now the Grim Reaper has come to reap me
I died at fifty when I was twenty-three
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Old before my time.
Review Request Intensity: Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Candlewitch
2 years 10 months ago
hello,
a great poem...it was like reading a page out of my diary or looking in the mirror... you understand. I managed to extract myself from that life/death.
*hugs, Cat
Depressed 1
2 years 10 months ago
Thanks
Thanks Cat. I am glad you survived.
Geezer
2 years 10 months ago
Thank you...
Depressed 1 for telling your tale. It may help someone to avoid taking the path that we did and let them live a "normal" life.
It was told simply and most effectively. Typo alert! [too late]. Nice job! ~ Geezer.
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Depressed 1
2 years 10 months ago
Thanks
Thanks for reading Geezer