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judyanne

May 16, 2016 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

twin

He hears and sees, as I meander through
this world that needs be taken day by day.
For cognisance, he has the perfect view -
my deepest thoughts, to him, are on display.

He shadow escorts me throughout the dreams
where I am Home - it's both surreal and real -
where unconditional love feeds me, it seems.
I wake to find I have a new found zeal.

Conflicting the accepted paradigm
of seperate single conscience, seperate soul,
I know that part of his is part of mine
and, while I am awake, I am not whole.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

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Comments

9 years 2 months ago

A beautiful poem, it lives

A beautiful poem, it lives halfway between this world and the next.Jx

9 years 2 months ago

Jane

Thank you for the visit and very kind comment
love judy
xxx

9 years 2 months ago

Beautifully written

poem about the shared love of created and creator. One who made us almost like gods with the power to create new life.

9 years 2 months ago

hi Keith

Thanks very much for the read and very supportive comment
love judy
xxx

9 years 2 months ago

HI Judyanne

So good to read your work - two in one, without which life is not whole. The content of this poem is both powerful and comforting!

Thank you for sharing!

Glad you're back - you are a great teacher - on so many levels.

Love Mand xxx

9 years 2 months ago

Mand !!! lovely to see you

Thank you so very much for the lovely and supportive comments
it's nice to be back
love judy
xxx

9 years 2 months ago

lovely!

As usual dear Judy.
I liked the "sshadow escorts" expression. (New for me)
And I'd capitalize 'he' and 'his', (just my humble opinion)

Thank you for sharing dear.

9 years 2 months ago

thanks Rula

I purposely didn't capitalise 'he / his'....
I didn't want to necessarily tie the subject to a deity, hoping it could be read in other ways as well

Love judy
xxx

9 years 2 months ago

I actually took it to mean a

I actually took it to mean a missing sibling. Gone, but for ever with you.
But then, I do take things rather literally at times :-) Jxx

9 years 2 months ago

yes Jane

The write has multiple meanings....
thank you
love judy
xxx