TYPO

Dear donna, your song's getting weak
your performative future is bleak
it's TIME you musk sing
of your master and king
oh, the sting, what a ding in the cheek!

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Dang! a limerick seemed to be in order. Thanks for reading!

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Lake Simcoe Canada

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, E.B. Browning, Theodor Seuss Geisel,

Comments

Obadiah Grey

5 months 1 week ago

Elon's musk...

I'm a conceptual billionaire,
my unpaid gas bill means fuck all to me,
tomorrow,

I'm a gonna buy me
a mind coat lined with thick meta fur
ignoring them chilblains that
just --

isn't there!
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Yers. The great unwashed.

WE hurple t'ward the Wabbit Warren
of pomposity;

reynards of levity,

lost.
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Triskelion

5 months 1 week ago

Hey, Obi!

...this one is mild to the original I keep dear. I heard that the photo was actually arranged while the donna was out golfing. her wife took the picture... What a loser...

Thomas

Obadiah Grey

5 months 1 week ago

I am at heart an Americanophile, or, as I prefer a Yankophile because it rhymes with my hobby,
Brought up on "I love Lucy" and "Mister Ed".
Anyways, a few wars later and couple o' divorces, Trumps in, been voted in by an apparent democratic process, so I ask myself am I really that out of touch with the realty of how much America and the world in general have moved on since Fonzy said " Heyyyy,,," and Joey said "How YOU doun,,,", and coming to the conclusion, when the fuck will Dorothy click her heels together.

Triskelion

5 months 1 week ago

Just curious

...do you remember the prophecy "Being There" with Peter Sellers?

Triskelion

5 months 1 week ago

...and Dorothy?

Heh, she's plum wore that trick down to the bone by now...Mr. Ed is holding the heel to the boot. Fonzi changed Heyyyyy to (your guess) ...Joey and him are working on a kid together, I also heard.
Hmmm...I still love Lucy

I'm a philophobe myself...cheers, Obi

Thomas