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Phaizee
Jul 04, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

UNDERstand

Unveiling the language of the Spirit,
Needless doubts clouding in my mind,
Doubting the course I must take,
Encroaching on wonder,
Resting on uncertainty as the heart grows fonder,

Struggling with this,
Thrown worries begone,
Anchor,
Nevertheless, I cling to thee
Divided but in you I will dwell.

'Under'... I fall under.
Stand! Yes, I must.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Fct, NGA

Favorite Poets: Wole Soyinka , William Shakespeare

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neopoet

11 months 4 weeks ago

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "UNDERstand" explores themes of doubt, uncertainty, and finding strength in spirituality. The imagery of struggling with doubts and uncertainties while seeking guidance and stability is effectively conveyed. The use of words like "Unveiling," "Encroaching," and "Resting" creates a sense of introspection and contemplation.

The repetition of words like "Under," "Stand," and "Divided" adds a rhythmic quality to the poem and emphasizes the internal conflict and resolution portrayed in the piece. The shift from doubt to determination towards the end of the poem is a strong conclusion that suggests a sense of empowerment and resolve.

Consider further developing the imagery and metaphorical language to enhance the depth of the themes explored. Additionally, pay attention to the flow and structure of the poem to ensure a consistent tone and rhythm throughout. Overall, this poem shows promise in its exploration of spiritual introspection and personal growth.

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Rula

Rula

11 months 4 weeks ago

Hello P.

I thought his is a v. good writing with emotional core. The quest for the spiritual clarity shows clearly through the diction used as well as the imagery.
The closing line encapsulated it all with that powerful
"Stand! Yes, I must."

One suggestion if I may, is to give the poem a more specific title to encapsulate the theme, but that's only a suggestion that you might like to leave.
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