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Sep 10, 2022
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Unrequited
Let me gather my thoughts...
they drift around me like
fallen leaves before the rain,
like flyaway cottonwood
stirred by my wandering feet.
I scatter each thought of you
with every bewildered step.
Let me gather my thoughts...
You are in my sunlight.
You are in my silence.
You are in my music,
my poetry,
my rain.
If there could ever be a day
with no thought of you,
I would somehow
miss you still.
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About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
3 years 1 month ago
Yeah
I love it. It’s so inviting. No corrections or suggestions, I just love it.
Tim
Lavender
3 years 1 month ago
Hi, Tim,
Thank you for reading. Your comments mean a lot to me!
L
Geezer
3 years 1 month ago
Absolutely...
How I wish that I had written this! It says everything that one might say to the love of their life. Not a single word out of place.
~ Geez.
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Lavender
3 years 1 month ago
Hello, Geezer,
I find that love is the hardest subject to write about. I'm glad you like this!
Thank you!
L
Geezer
3 years 1 month ago
Love is hardly...
hard to write about when writing from the mind of a poet such as yourself, who uses the pen as a conduit for emotions buried
and hidden. ~ Geez.
.
Lavender
3 years 1 month ago
Dear Geez,
Thank you...
L
lovedly
3 years 1 month ago
this para does suffice unrequital love still...
If there could ever be a day
with no thought of you,
I would somehow
miss you still.
nicely slapped......
Lavender
3 years 1 month ago
Hi, Lovedly,
Thank you very much!
L
lovedly
3 years 1 month ago
I like poems but
minuscule they must convey................one's mood
Lavender
3 years 1 month ago
Hi, Lovedly,
I believe I understand what you mean...
L
Lavender
3 years 1 month ago
Hello, Mark,
Thank you for reading and your generous comment. I appreciate it!
L