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May 01, 2025
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Until There Are No Spaces Between Us
I twist the tip
Of her queen pawn
She makes graceful
Movements astride the board
Her eyes inviting me
To whichsoever fate
Her beautiful throat
Flowing into her blouse
Those erotic mounts
Between the hidden Vale
Of Venus
Our parents laugh
At the mystery:
"They're playing
A children's game"
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