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Jan 04, 2012
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Untitled # 1
We are the peoples' nation of Zrcheckslovanounious.
No one is able to pronounce us.
Our citizens therefore denounce us.
We're a proud population of three.
Our emperor he is a llama.
Who has his very own song-a.
He wrote it whilst hitting a bong-a.
He'll 'maaaaah' at you for free.
So welcome to the Republic.
Don't drink our water - you'll get sick.
Our Emperor Mo Mao Mick
says: 'mahh mahh mahh merr meer meee'
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Motivation and focus: My profile random question over on blogspot asked to "write a new national anthem using an animal sound at least once." - I figured it was a ridiculous and silly request, so I found it fitting to write a ridiculous poem, and therefore tried to stretch the boundaries of lunacy! Format is a modified Tanaga Quadrameter. Hopefully, the right selection was made as to 'eastern' or 'western' It is untitled for now, because I haven't been able to think up something epic yet. I'm going for full-blown ridiculous.
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
scribbler
13 years 5 months ago
lol
I'll trade leaders with you lmao.........stan
wesley snow
13 years 5 months ago
Awesome!
The last stanza could use some tweaking with the meter (especially since the first two are excellent), but otherwise I just plain loved this poem.
wesley
China Blue
13 years 5 months ago
Jess
LOL what an imagination you have. I wouldn't know how to begin or where to critique this one lol
So I'll sit back laugh and leave it alone
Eduardo Cruz
13 years 5 months ago
Welcxome back buddy!
Wow you suceeded in your attempt!!
epic, can ridiculous be that. I have heard epic stupid. wait I have been that once or twice in my life.
nice to see you back, are you done with school.
Eddie
Candlewitch
13 years 5 months ago
Hi Jess,
" asked to "write a new national anthem using an animal sound at least once." - I figured it was a ridiculous and silly request, so I found it fitting to write a ridiculous poem, and therefore tried to stretch the boundaries of lunacy!"
I think you have succeded marvelously in your endeavor! And I want you to know that I laughed my @ss off!
No suggestions, just appreciation!
always, Cat