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Feb 21, 2023
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A symphony
of prayer
touches my mind
in the peace
of whispered words
I soothe my heart
some are imprinted
without thought
as filigreed light
warms my soul,
they slip out
as adoration sung
from the heart
in these moments
of reverence
and love
where no pain
can burn
or malice survive
I come as close to heaven
as I can bear to be
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Lavender
2 years 4 months ago
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Hello, Jayne,
A beautiful capture of what feels like, to me, a divine phenomenal moment.
L
Seren
2 years 4 months ago
Dearest L
To say it was profound is an understatement. Thanks so much for reading this one I'm really not sure what to call it.
Thank you for your insight!
Love J x
Lavender
2 years 4 months ago
Hi, Jayne,
Maybe there are no words that fit a suitable title for such a glorious experience...
My heart overflows from this.
Lxx
Seren
2 years 4 months ago
Hugs J x
Hugs
J x
Leslie
2 years 4 months ago
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I loved this also, because it reveals the nature of the HUMAN heart, without compromising the acceptance of divinity!
I feel to say that the poetry that I've read has all been exceptional. This is a fun and safe place to work my feelings out
in a positive way! This is beautiful!
Leslie
2 years 4 months ago
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I loved this also, because it reveals the nature of the HUMAN heart, without compromising the acceptance of divinity!
I feel to say that the poetry that I've read has all been exceptional. This is a fun and safe place to work my feelings out
in a positive way! This is beautiful!
Leslie
2 years 4 months ago
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I loved this also, because it reveals the nature of the HUMAN heart, without compromising the acceptance of divinity!
I feel to say that the poetry that I've read has all been exceptional. This is a fun and safe place to work my feelings out
in a positive way! This is beautiful!
Seren
2 years 4 months ago
Dear Aesthetic Night
I am glad you're feeling comfortable here it should be a place you can come and feel safe to reveal self without fear of anything, I really appreciate your comment I am glad you found something in this to connect to.
Kind Regards Seren
Geezer
2 years 4 months ago
In moments...
like this, one might tend to fall back upon the prayers learned by rote, and somehow retained over years of disuse. A magical moment, captured! ~ Love and higgest bugs, Geez.
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Seren
2 years 4 months ago
Dearest Bro
Thanks so much these are moments that are treasured and always tucked into that pocket of memories.
thanks so much for the read and the insight they're always appreciated!
Love and higgliest bugs Sis xox
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 4 months ago
Hear the softly spoken magic spells
I’m borrowing from Pink Floyd of course. But I thought of the last lines of the “Time” when I read your poem.
Tim
Seren
2 years 4 months ago
Dear Tim
I know that song & actually went and listened to it again when I read your comment,
Thanks for your thoughts they're always appreciated!
Kind Regards Jayne
Seren
2 years 4 months ago
Dear Kat
I am really glad you liked those lines they're also important to me and are the heart of this poem.
thanks for the lovely comment I really appreciate it!
Jayne xxx
Seren
2 years 4 months ago
Dear Mark
Thank you so much if it brought you peace in any sense or gave you a moment of rest, well, that's why I wrote this one it attempts to describe the indescribable.
Thanks so much for the read its always appreciated.
Hugs Jayne xxx
RoseBlack
2 years 4 months ago
Amazing
Another brilliant piece! These spiritual moments are so incredible and precious. You did a wonderful job of capturing the feel of that moment.
Seren
2 years 4 months ago
Dearest Carrie
If I conveyed in anyway the moment, I have shared more than anyone could realise. Thank you so much for your thoughts and the read its always appreciated!
Love and biggest hugs Jayne