untitled light

the moon fills with light
silver ribbons beam on down
Earth lowers her eyes

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Comments

Rula

12 years 6 months ago

I find difficulty in

"On down " a bit confusing but may be it is only me.

Seren

12 years 6 months ago

hi Rula

Light beams from the moon and on down to earth ... That's the way I mean
It maybe a language thing ? I'm sure its not just me me lol we say come on down

Thanks for the read and comment

Regards Jc x

sueb

12 years 6 months ago

lovely

Seren

12 years 6 months ago

Thank you very much Sue !

Jc ~