themoonman

May 14, 2012 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Valedictorian

She was a sooner-cum-loudly,
the top of her class,
genuine guttural groans
when I'd smack on that ass

and like any boy scout
I was always prepared
when she wanted it done
no level was spared

I'd slow down the roll
like the rest of us should
so I wouldn't let go
till she was all good

... and with a sigh of relief
flipped my hat in the air
I graduated with honor
at the college of Claire.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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Comments

temidayo

13 years 2 months ago

ha! so you got merit

hmmm! the wordings are nice , very well hid, if i had a clean mind i would think you had a memorable grad day. but now, i still wonder about the last paragraph. well writ.

themoonman

13 years 2 months ago

temidayo ...

Hello, nice to meet you sir

If we had clean minds our moments
would become less than dazzling.

What were you wondering about the last
stanza?

thank you for reading, commenting and
making me think

Richard

scribbler

13 years 2 months ago

Hi Richard

Hope the tuition was not too high to becum a valedickedorian lol......................stan

themoonman

13 years 2 months ago

lol ...

Ya know ya can't play without payin

judyanne

13 years 2 months ago

lol richard

this is so good - i love it

great alliteration and word usage in 'genuine guttural groans'
and rotflmao at 'She was a sooner-cum-louldly' -- but typo here :)

oh poor claire - you shouldn't've named her you cad --- lol
- nice alliteration here too with 'the college of claire'

love judy
xxxx

themoonman

13 years 2 months ago

Judy,

Claire would love it !!!

didn't even notice the typo ... jeeez, old eyes ya know

Thanks Judy

Kailashana2

13 years 2 months ago

You sure it wasn't from the

You sure it wasn't from the college of St. Claire? And did you marry her? Make her an undergraduate?

~you bad boy you, kissin-'an'-a-tellin'!

themoonman

13 years 2 months ago

lol

I can't tell everything, what would I say tomorrow !!!

lovely to see ya Anna