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Aug 19, 2013
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valley of no return
There in the valley
There is the valley
only one I know of
and
reading your version
will make me drown
in that valley of no return
where one has been
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
11 years 11 months ago
Sorry loved...
If it is the "Valley of No Return" then no one can ever have BEEN there. Because [been] implies that one is no longer there. But, maybe they just left and didn't come back here? That way, they didn't return!
As always, ~ Gee
loved
11 years 11 months ago
valley of supposedly no return was
I thought a cliche kind
maybe I'm wrong
it is or was
like an experience where one would continue to stay
as if for ever as if == desire of no return
Ian.T
11 years 11 months ago
Loved
As with Gee, you cannot have been in the Valley of no return.
Though with Poetic licence you can do as you will lol.
That you are here and witnessed that valley from your point of view is good, we shall celebrate that you never set foot in there it is a desolate place..
Great to see you, as sense prevailed, and protected your Sojourn with the thoughts of staying with us here, Yours Ian.T
loved
11 years 11 months ago
SO FAR so good
till i decide to stay there
not to return