themoonman

Nov 08, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Vanity's Tell

That vain bone is longer'n
both your arms,
worse'n Kathy Lee
and her put on charms.

Pretentiously caring,
with your hair slicked back,
but that magazine smile
highlights empathy's lack.

Those give and take feelings,
you think to display,
they're not fooling anybody
... not today.

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Comments

themoonman

14 years 8 months ago

Hi Jayne ...

We do all have our vanities, that's why I left the subject
neutral and I failed to include myself ... perhaps need to
amend that discrepancy.

Kathy Lee ... I'm referring to Kathy Lee Gifford, she's been
on morning t.v. in America for quite a while, but maybe you've
not heard of her. She is undoubtedly loved by many here, but
to me she oozes falseness, perhaps it's just me.

thanks for reading

Richard

judyanne

14 years 8 months ago

i really like this richard

i absolutely adore
'Your vain bone is longer'n
both your arms,'... made me smile

'cracks empathy's lack' - i have a bit of trouble with the word 'cracks' - does it have another meaning i don't know?
to 'crack empathy's lack' to me says that the smile can break what empathy doesn't have...?

i wonder (and you know it's just me... smile)
'Pretentiously caring,
with your slicked back hair ,
but that magazine smile
lacks empathy's care '.... ??

love judy
xxxx
.

themoonman

14 years 8 months ago

Hi Judy ...

Thank you for reading and commenting.

Cracks empathy's lack ... silly me was trying to carry on the image of the
magazine, the crack in the middle, best abandoned as it clearly wasn't
working. Thank you Judy!!!

themoonman

14 years 8 months ago

Hi Chrys...

Yes, plastic is a great description,

thanks for dropping in.

Nordic cloud

14 years 8 months ago

You put me in a wonderfully absurd mood

Oh great this mr moonman
dancing on a spoon man
spilling words like crackers
down the page with quackers

You put me in a wonderfully absurd mood
and I always enjoy that very much, great fun,
makes me want more of it richard, yes do?

Love Ann

themoonman

14 years 8 months ago

Ann of Norway ...

So good to see you here, and there isn't anything wrong with
a wonderful absurdity ... I love it when I'm there.

to the dance we stroll

Lenny of Cohen

14 years 8 months ago

tickled me!

nice humorous writing! really enjoyed this fine piece of work!

Namaste,

Lenny

themoonman

14 years 8 months ago

Lenny...

Thank you sir, glad to see you !

love that signature line ... we wake up in a new skin every day
and most don't even know it.

scribbler

14 years 8 months ago

vanity

Vanity's name may be "Woman " as some suggest but its describer is Richard lol.....scribbler

themoonman

14 years 8 months ago

Hi Stan...

I've met lots of men with over sensitive vanities as well,
it's that durn human thing coming through.

thanks Stan

ziggy

14 years 8 months ago

hi

hi, i love the title and the theme
and the opening lines are brill
and my fav too, i too don't know
kathy lee but your comments
explains all that, did you say
you might include your self in this
write of yours, i'd find that hard to
do with a theme like this ,,,,,zigs

themoonman

14 years 8 months ago

Hi Ziggy ...

thanks man, I'm sure there are television personalities there
that parallel Kathy Lee's plasticity. I am planning on a revision
on this, I've changed it a little now, but plan on "attempting"
to improve it, we'll see huh.

thanks again

Hooded Stranger

14 years 8 months ago

Richard

Really liked this piece. I naturally (but wrongly) assumed this was a conversation with yourself in the mirror. I do know who Kathy Lee is, which then threw me off a little as I couldn't really see you compared to her, but it wasn't about you anyway, so what does it matter.

Did I say it was a great write?

themoonman

14 years 8 months ago

Dan ...

the look in the mirror I truly loved, and although it wasn't intended,
it just may be when I can place that thought to everyone.

I think we all have that nasty vain bone ... some are much more prominent.

thanks for the read my friend

Bonitaj

14 years 8 months ago

Richard!

You're back on form there buddy! Nice to see! Just looked up something on THE BONFIRE OF THE VANITIES by Tom Wolfe the other day - this would seem appropriate as a title here too.
Most especially LOVED the last verse!
Those give and take feelings,
you think to display,
they're not fooling anybody
... not today.

Least of all you kiddo! ;)
Nice one!
Boni

themoonman

14 years 8 months ago

Boni...

Thanks for reading and leaving your thoughtful comment ...
Tom Wolfe, excellent writer.

isn't it great to be home on Neo!

loved

14 years 8 months ago

If I am permitted to buttt in

You could might as well perhaps
Post this lovely longerin’s poem
To W Bush, Putin,
and
The Canadian PM,
Who is he?
Gosh forgot his name.
The Bush, Exprez and the PM
Had a nice joke to share
In his memoirs now in the air,
Perhaps with Kathy Lee what!!!
Would be found
Assessing these longer’ines

Oh yah,
Harper Collins,
Rather Stephen Harper
Yeah that's the one
Canadian PM.

themoonman

14 years 8 months ago

Hi Loved...

indeed, the whole world is full of vain people ...

thanks, glad to see you here.