Vantage Point

I did everything, except tying my shoe laces
with one shoe in future, other in the present
my feet won't need them, when I leap ahead
but laces shall tie me, to footprints that fade

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

Comments

Jackweb

7 years 1 month ago

I fathom the message of this powerful piece

Yeah, one thing is certain in the future, and that is the time we all shall have our individual exit in life. The third line and the last line pictured when a dead man lie prostrate inside the coffin and rest in grave.
When we were alive we tried our best to put the best cloth ever, and wear expensive shoes... but whenever death hits us another person had to dress us up in especially in the morgue -for the last time.

raj

7 years 1 month ago

Thanks Jack

for taking the time to read, analyze the poem by reading between the lines and sharing your perspective.
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Jackweb

7 years 1 month ago

You are highly welcome

This is what i thought the poem was saying...'Our final exit' I believe the author must have his own original intent of the poem.

raj

7 years 1 month ago

Hi again Jack

until I read perceptions of others who may visit this page...i can tell you that there can be multiple perceptions ...yours is one of them quite close and in sync with the theme..

Thanks for visiting again..
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raj

7 years 1 month ago

Hi Mark

Thanks for taking time to read and share with me your perception of between the lines message...As mentioned to Jack in my reply to his comment above different people perceive different things from the Vantage Point....I liked how you analyzed it in your own way..that's the fun of writing in abstract...isn't it?

Thanks again..
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Rula

7 years 1 month ago

Dear raj

for me this is a pure call to enjoy the present moment.
No need to look back or think about the future.
I really like the shoe /lace metaphor, you've employ effectively in this short evoking thought.

raj

7 years 1 month ago

Thanks Rula for taking time

Thanks Rula for taking time in your busy month of Ramadan to read and comment. Good to know you liked it..
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