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Sep 16, 2016
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VENOUS VENUSA
She ran hot
like an old knucklehead
lust was her consumption
burning in the white flash
of wolfish cheekbone
Long albino pale legs
like forks
chopper cool
But
no ones fool
..
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Sommer Lyn
8 years 10 months ago
This is stunning but hard -
This is stunning but hard - like the thrust of a shiny knife or a single flash back from a bad trip, where everyone's this beautiful but dangerous animal. The lone shard of a broken mirror. Good write.
Esker
8 years 10 months ago
soft and slick
a mind thats crooked and sick....
and Sick Like deliciously Good!
crooked like good...shards of the labyrinth
Think Asia...clouds..fog and limestone inlets
think Boreal...rivers of rock beds
wending...winding...
watched parts of The Orphan
listening to Seek Amy by Brit..awesome song...
I know a handful...the pocket bright cases of
the most sweetest looking intense girls...
society thinks of men and study for pyscopathy
but the even more beautiful flowers of iradiated
essence are the women...
somehow I survived...
somehow whatever passed for Love
exists
epic ...havent even scratched the
surface for that writing
...
today we take movies like Kubrick
and Coppola and Scorcese
but in the day..When they were brand
new.....when there was no Internet
nothing too compare..
it takes years for all of it too sink
in settle in...
I know people like this
so much gets removed
so much gets put inside
the pysche
soul
heart
mind
its not for everyone
Venus...the morning brilliant godess from the long black hours
MEdusa for the power
I Love mythologies...
Thank U!
a most accurate straight up
view on this
Thus the re verb echo comment
in its location blip....
insert sly exhausted smile
on an old wolfs mug
Bravo Missy!
Esker
8 years 10 months ago
critical thinking
and grammar..Remember/reminding! just off the web from mini classes
Thinking...a whole other world...there is so much missing in my head
so much mis-use of grammar and logic! seriously I suffer from thought
association and disorder....think I was just born this way...but had a lot
of crashes too the head...dyslexic in school...almost impossible to critique
..so I just found critical thinking.....
I will keep on...I am reminded of stuff...in my head a lot of this is blurry
but poems are like spells that kick start...open or kick open cool ideas
feelings...Reminded memories of Remembering
which leads too Thinking!
A poem makes U think....about....
what...why...
i guess its combinations that turn the next
combination too opening that
I think
I am reminded...
hmm....something new
exciting...
probably reads as some
kind of new funky Esker
notation...
its interesting!
...