Race_9togo

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Virtual Pagan Protection For a Candle Witch I Know

her's is a flame that splinters night,
unflickering and solid in our hearts
to make the darkest of us bright
and unify our shattered parts

she casts the gleam of cleansing light
her candles bring into our dark
with unrelenting sense of right
no lies can ever mar or mark,

for all of us she is deep prayers
lifted up on chanted lips afar
rising in the moonbeam cares
of gleaming poem and candle star.

So here I make a circle of protection,
strong against all hateful gossip's blame
stand with us in its center, Candle Witch,
and share with us your warming flame.

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Earth Vicinity (within a five light-year radius), ZZC

Favorite Poets: John Donne, T.S. Eliot, Serendipity, Emily Dickenson, Kailashana, Charles Bukowski, Kabir, Rett, Dalton, W. B. Yeats, William Blake, Rainer Maria Rilke, and many other Neopoet poets; Neopoet has heavily influenced my poetry and my ability to write it well.

Comments

Geezer

13 years 9 months ago

Very nice...

You have captured the spirit that she embodies, the wish for all to live in peace and harmony.
A few little niggles... How about simplifying the last line of the first stanza, and lose that magnificent word [myriad]? [I am sure that you can find another poem for it]. Just say: and unify our shattered parts.
You could also switch the last line of the third stanza around a little, and say: For all of us, she is deep prayers. Last line of the third stanza, how about just leaving the word [of] off? All are just suggestions, just a little something to ease the rythm. ~ Gee

Race_9togo

13 years 8 months ago

Thanks Gee,

I needed your critique, I made some changes and it does flow more smoothly.

Race_9togo

13 years 8 months ago

Thanks Lonnie

Not me though, my friend, just her.
She prayed loud and warm for me when I was sick, and I felt her prayer.
Just returning the favor.

Race_9togo

13 years 8 months ago

:)

Thanks hun.

Hooded Stranger

13 years 8 months ago

Jim

Jim,

you have captured the true Cat in this piece.

The last stanza:

So here I make a circle of protection,
strong against all hateful gossip's blame
stand with us in its center, Candle Witch,
and share with us your warming flame.

is perfection!

I am also pleased to tell you that Cat has rescinded her resignation.

She has been overwhelmed by the response to her announcement and this poem goes a long way to express how we all feel about her.

Good job mate,

Race_9togo

13 years 8 months ago

Thanks Dan,

And thanks even more for letting us all know that cat will stay with us, and continue her leadership.

magics02

13 years 8 months ago

Race

So here I make a circle of protection,
strong against all hateful gossip's blame
stand with us in its center, Candle Witch,
and share with us your warming flame.

This says it all and I surround that same circle of protection from all hate and gossip as well. Very nice job Jim. Love this.

Mona

Race_9togo

13 years 8 months ago

Thanks Mona,

Glad you like it!

Candlewitch

13 years 8 months ago

Dear Jim,

I am in awe of your words and struck humble by your praise and good wishes so poetically written. Thank you so very much for your support. It means a lot to me!

Brightest of Blessings to you,
love, Cat

Race_9togo

13 years 8 months ago

Cat,

I've known you long enough to know that a) you mean a great deal to all of us, and b) the nastiness that you have been subjected to is both evil, and complete lies, garbage of the worst kind.
You are welcome, it is my pleasure and delight.

Candlewitch

13 years 8 months ago

Hugs

Thanks Rosi,

I love y'all too!

always, Cat