The Visit

Iron gate, unlatched,
cedars quietly swaying;
from the West, a new moon sails by.
On your tomb, neglected –
one wilted rose and a letter of goodbye.

Moonshadows cast scintilla of radiance
on your picture framed by granite:
praying, I pause with clasped hands.

Soon the dawns
will be merry and twittering,
there will be luminous tomorrows.
Keep living –
don’t be drained by sorrow.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Río Negro, Argentine Patagonia, ARG

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath, T.S. Elliot. Shakespeare, Gongora, Beckett, etc. Many others, such as Cervantes. I have to thank my mother because she read poetry to me from the cradle, so first I learned by memory and soon understood the words. Grammar comes naturally at about 5 years old, without any formal teaching.

Comments

Ray Whitaker

3 years 9 months ago

There upon the stone

A whole life remains
What of the involvement residual
Anchored to the past
Inert, to moving forward

Gracy

3 years 9 months ago

Hi Ray, thanks so much for

Hi Ray, thanks so much for your comment. Not sure I know what you mean, but all nits are welcome. I had in mind my sons, Robert and Patrick, who died very young, 21 and 29 years old.
There is, of course, residual (and far more) sorrow remaining to this day.
Best wishes, Gracy

lovedly

3 years 9 months ago

very emotional Grace

after years
yourdevotion
is worthy of appreciation

Gracy

3 years 9 months ago

Hi lovedly, thanks for always

Hi lovedly, thanks for always stopping by with appreciative comments. You're right, devotion to the past of my loved ones is still present today.
Bless you, Gracy

scribbler

3 years 9 months ago

Hi Grace

most excellent imagery as well as message

Gracy

3 years 9 months ago

Hi scribbler, so glad you

Hi scribbler, so glad you like it. I still want to work on it, I'm not satisfied myself with it.
Thanks for dropping by. Best wishes!