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Nov 14, 2013
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Vocal haiku 1
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Seriously, do you think this might be a path worth pursuing, if I learned a little restraint and effectiveness on the effects?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
mand
11 years 8 months ago
It sounded quite eerie - I
It sounded quite eerie - I think it would be very effective - it was like a watery echo - it would be interesting to see how you will/can develop it as a poetic vocal art form!
Love Mand xxx
weirdelf
11 years 8 months ago
ta
Mand
Seren
11 years 8 months ago
Jess
In my opinion the effects were over done I couldn't understand what was being said I even put the headphones on and still the quality wasn't good enough for me to hear what was being said I will try again later it maybe my connection
take care JC x
mand
11 years 8 months ago
Hi Jess
I agree with JC - it was incomprehensible but has potential.
weirdelf
11 years 7 months ago
thanks Jayne and Beau
yep, effects are like garlic, great slave, terrible master. Gonna do an online course because the whole "word sound sculpture" concept intrigues me.
weirdelf
11 years 7 months ago
gotcha, yes, makes perfect sense.
I always get tremendously excited at the prospect of learning something new or refining my understanding of something. The trouble is that although I'm not tone deaf, I love music, I don't think I have a very subtle ear. Sound tracks were always difficult for me when film-making. Ah well, I do have a good ear for poetry so, nothing ventured etc.