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The Voice of Christmas Past... Memories of Holidays Past contest
The voice of Christmas Past
keeps whispering in my ear
I don't want to go with him
I'm pulling back in fear
“Come on, he says, for a while
I won't hurt you much”
I just want to show you
you need a Christmas touch”
“Bah, Humbug, leave me be
you're a bit of moldy bread
Just a dream I'm having
I shouldn't eat, then go to bed”
His touch is cold, ice in my heart
hand held in frozen fingers
“See, the school you used to go to
there is a memory that lingers”
Third grade Secret Santa
I remember tears so well
Pick-up sticks for a present
I gave a silver bell
The tears I cried were silent
but the sobs were in my voice
The teacher asked me why
and said, “You should rejoice”
I felt foolish and too proud
so I never said, the reason
But now, I see it better
in that long past Christmas season
I hope that little girl
that was gifted with a bell
rang it every Christmas season
Pick-up sticks are #%&*ing swell!
So lesson-learned, Christmas Past
take me home right now!
It's better giving than receiving
go on, take a bow!
As I sat back to watch the snowfall
my stomach rumbled once or twice
and I thought Christmas Past should stumble
Break his ass upon the ice.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Stream of consciousness thinking about Christmas Past and Ebenezer Scrooge and this old memory popped up!
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
lonlyhrtsclub13
7 years 7 months ago
We all
Have our ghosts of christmas past....good story, good imagery with your usual twist of humor. Love it.
lovedly
7 years 7 months ago
Humbug, leave ...me be
blah! lots I see are now saying
Humbug,
leave...... me be
instead of
let me be
what's really the difference
do enlighten me
Gee
Geezer
7 years 7 months ago
It's just...
a matter of vernacular. A good question though! ~ Gee.
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lovedly
7 years 6 months ago
kindness
and thanks for the appreciation.
I am known for the questions I ask
it helps guys improve///research
and
get GOLD
now I am getting bored and old
soonly may be like ESKER
COLD
Captain
7 years 6 months ago
Great rhyming schemes! as
Great rhyming schemes! as usual. And funny! Merry Christmas Geezer!
Captain
Geezer
7 years 6 months ago
Thanks Captain...
A Merry Christmas to you too! Have a dram of the Captain for me will you, Captain?
~ Geezer.
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brittle light
7 years 6 months ago
I hate thinking about my past
I hate thinking about my past. All scenarios cast me as the jerk, never quite on the mark with anything.
but I suppose that shows some growth and maturity, (that I recognize my past foibles)
nice piece you have written
regards,
Al
ps hope you have liability insurance for broken asses
Geezer
7 years 6 months ago
@#$% him...
I rent! And you can't get blood from a stone, I got nothing he can sue me for!
~ Gee.
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