Void

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Zigs, your poem is rich with vivid imagery with an intense sense of inner conflict. The way you capture the relentless, cyclical nature of your thoughts really conveys a feeling of being trapped within the mind, where each idea feeds into the next, & there's no escape from the storm inside. The contrast between wanting to be free from others' judgment while also struggling with personal torment is particularly poignant.

It feels to me like you're exploring a struggle with identity & perception, how we view ourselves versus how others might perceive us, & how that affects our mental & emotional states. Your reference to heaven & hell suggests a duality, maybe reflecting a constant battle between desires & fears, or even self-worth.

Absolutely awesome piece of art my friend,

regards

One

I do so hope this poem of yours wins the spot of poem of the week!

I read "one's" response and I completely agree with it! Smooth as a baby's butt! my favorite lines are:

Self directed expression seeking a
Void to fill my own empty space.

so true, my friend!
much love, Cat

Hello, Ziggy,
Enjoyed the way this flowed, the inner rhyme and enjambment. Strong anxiety is felt throughout.
Thank you,
L