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Voyage of the Rum Runner…Chapter VII

Alas I encountered no mermaids
With fathoms below and twenty foot seas above
I watched as my former prison at sea
Was swallowed whole by towering whitecaps
Tenaciously they drove the over stuffed hull into the reef
Illuminated by the strobing of forked lightning
A dark archipelago loomed foreboding
Behind me, a doomed ship began to come apart
Aided by the furious maelstrom
I drifted more than swam until at last consciousness evaded me…
Head throbbing and mouth dry
I awoke to the sound of surf on sand

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I’m trying! Lol

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S.A., USA

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Walt Whitman. I’m enamored by the work of lyricists such as Robert Hunter, John Barlow, John Dyer Baizley, and Tom Marshall just to name a handful.

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Comments

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 11 months ago

dear Tim,

excellent on continuing the story line to its conclusion. very nice imagery!

*hugs, Cat

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 11 months ago

Nice job...

I was especially convinced that his story, was a mix of hallucination and memory of how he came to be shipwrecked on that
island. Thank you for concluding our first try at this. ~ Geez.
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