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Aug 17, 2018
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W E A L T H: Fehu [Runic Symbols]
When W e a l t h equals ethics, it lasts endlessly when everything else's lost.
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
raj
6 years 11 months ago
Rula
your perception of wealth is pretty strong...I will look forward to how it evolves when you do the edits...i will keep following this...in the mean time I guess you need to correct the spello in the title...
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Rula
6 years 11 months ago
Thank you raj
for the correction.
Where else do you think I need to rework?
raj
6 years 11 months ago
I have a gut feeling that
I have a gut feeling that there could be more variations.....let me sleep over this and may be I will come up with a few suggestions for your perusal
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raj
6 years 11 months ago
Just realized
that these one liners can become good signature lines...don't they?
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Rula
6 years 11 months ago
There are
absolutely different versions. Does this mean this isn't a good one? And yep for the signature suggestion !
raj
6 years 11 months ago
i did say that your
i did say that your perception of wealth is pretty strong...didn't I? so get that that thought outta your mind that this is not good enough...ok?
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raj
6 years 11 months ago
Hi Rula
don't know if this is a good version
When w e a l t h is built on code of ethics, it's hard to end up a pauper
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Rula
6 years 11 months ago
thank you dear raj
thank you. Of course, it's good enough to give me a hint.
Any better now?
Hope i didn't mess as usual
raj
6 years 11 months ago
Good change Rula
Good change Rula
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Rula
6 years 11 months ago
Thank you so much
for letting me know the changes aren't bad dear raj.
raj
6 years 11 months ago
Hey common Rula! now where
Hey common Rula! now where this "bad" comes from?...i did say they are good...
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