walking alone

The sun was setting
on a perfect day,
the last light fading
as the insects played,

The swans were looking
for their nesting lair,
the path was winding
me back home,

a flying fox was swooping
way down low,
the moon reflecting
made the water glow,

tear were starting
much to my surprise,
as I stopped
to dry my eyes.

I had to think
Just what was wrong with me,
Had I finally
fell out my tree,

Then I realized
you were gone from me,
And I was walking
now alone.

She loved the lake here
on a night like this,
we’d often walk until
the darkness hit,

but then the blood test
took us back a bit,
…
we buried her in spring.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Just a quick one, from a memory of a friend who lost his wife a number of years back, they used to walk every night past the lake on the golf course, Why do I always finish up writing tragedy stories?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: sydney,Australia, AUS

Comments

Candlewitch

13 years 1 month ago

Dear beleive,

beautifully told. Sad but lovely. The reading brought a tear.

always, Cat

believe

13 years 1 month ago

Thanks

Thanks Candlewitch Appreciate Ray

PRECIOUSLYSET1

13 years 1 month ago

Thank you for the unexpected naptime story!! Complete enjoyment

I actually was rocking my 2 yr old to sleep for nap when I read this and
ended up reading it to him as he fell asleep but in a slow, sing-song style
that I think for my reading
lightened the mood
i really enjoyed this, Cael did too!!

Tragedy scenarios are so deeply embedded into us
from children as we grow into adults
so I feel completely comfortable when writing
horrible actions .. its a natural comfort to me, i guess

People that ALWAYS smile, never have bad days,
get along w everybody they meet and does not have 1-5
personal tragedy stories .. uuumm

They scare me !! Without tragedy in our life then
how can we ever fully appreciate the simple happiness
that we do have? we wouldnt !!

I say keep writing about what comes out naturally
do not conform ur writing just to appease the unnatural
"always happy" ppl .. its almost definitely a mask they wear!!

believe

13 years 1 month ago

Thanks

Thanks for your nice comments,
Appreciate ray