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Oct 29, 2013
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Wannabe
bare bulb
flicks / flecks
cracked plaster ceiling
dangling
a frizzy / frazzeled string
swinging and swaying as
upstairs thumpers
loving steady
rock
rhythems of humdrum
perfunctory
a smokey glaze distorts
disturbing soot faced
backstreet manoevers,
and all the goings-on of
a dirty downtown byway
my home away
today
to play
the starving artist, man!
an anorexic of comfort
suffering culture
through stereotypical cliches;
the cold-cocking shock
of poverty, loneliness, failure,
and its strange allure
I start my inevitable pacing
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Roscoe Lane
11 years 8 months ago
This is,
This is very good, i can picture the dispair with every line. Regards Roscoe...
brittle light
11 years 8 months ago
Roscoe
thanks for the complementary words.
very much appreciated.
Seren
11 years 8 months ago
Hey :)
The Steps into sadness and despair for the world around you, its depicted beautifully as only you can do, its nice to read you I have been away a while so I have missed reading everyone
thanks for this excellent piece its great to come back and read such quality work
love JC xxx
brittle light
11 years 8 months ago
hello JC
I too have been absent for about 4-5 months. This is the second piece since being back.
thank you for your kind words.
let's both hope for a long run this time around on Neopoet. I miss it when not participating.