War Is Not A Lady... Military Memories May Contest

Sharp like a knife
The edge of her tongue
Slices of hate fall from her lips
Butter won’t melt in her mouth

The ice of her heart refusing to thaw
In the heat of his passion
Sucking the breath from his life
Draining the strength of his soul

His heart sinks like a rock
There is no way out
Do or die
She wins...

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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Comments

gregwa8

7 years 2 months ago

an interesting look at how

an interesting look at how war is really a friend to no one. you've inspired me to enter the contest. btw how do i enter my own poem in the contest?

raj

7 years 2 months ago

It is pretty simple. In the boxes below your poem you will find a box for Contests. From its drop down menu select the contest. That's all.
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Geezer

7 years 2 months ago

So glad...

that I inspired you to enter the contest! As raj says; go to the drop down and select contest and the name of the contest. Look at the contest guidelines and let it fly! Good luck to you sir! ~ Geezer.
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Seren

7 years 2 months ago

Ello Bro

I adore this. I have no suggestion but that you should write more in this style. Good luck in the contest.

Love and higgliest bugs J x

raj

7 years 2 months ago

Hey Jayne

So good to see you back after disappearing for a pretty long time...stick on now...your presence means a lot for many like me..

may all be well...take best care...

much love and hugs..

Seren

7 years 2 months ago

Hello old friend

Sooo good to read you again.

Thank you for the welcome back
I've been very ill for sometime and it
meant I wasn't up to writing much
But tonight i felt the muse poking at me lol

So here I am I'll try to come round on a
more regular basis.

Love and big hugs J x

P.s.bear wifh me I'm very rusty lol

Geezer

7 years 2 months ago

Thank you...

My Aussie sis! I do have a need for free-form now and then. There are those thoughts that I just cannot formulate into rhyme. A different kind of simple brutality that even Killer fails to deliver. ~Gee.
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