The Watcher

I nearly felt the questions were too many...but the point of this poem was the secrecy, mystery and questioning. I cut them down from an earlier draft.
You're doing a good job reading the unread poems...I only don't want to think you just read this because it hasn't been read yet. It will make me happier if something in the preview compelled you to read.

Thanks for your critique!
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I often violate, Rula. I see you've mentioned this before.

Wesley reminded me that I can be lax on some of the rules of English grammar. This was during his workshop on Storytelling in Verse, when he cleverly broke many rules of conjunctions in one sentence. In my poetry, I use commas to force a pause. That's why you're likely to see them often, even when they may not be required. I use them to (hopefully) guide the reader to read the poem just as I would.

I spent most of my time composing on the last two lines. My earlier ones were really terrible, so this is the best I could manage...but your questioning it raises something interesting. There were two reasons that forced me to keep such conclusions. First, I didn't want every stanza of the poem to be a question. Second, I badly wanted to use the image of a "portrait on the wall".

To be honest, I like the couplet but I liked the poem better without them. :-/

Thanks for your thoughtful suggestions!

I wish this one will come alive and speak once more

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Thank you Raj :)

I'm glad you enjoyed it. :D

Another reading! I love it, even better than on "Change"