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Sep 30, 2016
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Water
In every droplet of water
lies the future of a generation
that has yet to come.
To waste it
is to invite tears of regret tomorrow,
the mark of despair.
Once lost,
it can never be replaced.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Roscoe Lane
8 years 9 months ago
Oh how very true,
Oh how very true, that water really is life. And how we humans waste water and life. Regards Roscoe...
alidzain
8 years 9 months ago
Hi Roscoe
I was thinking what to write when this one pops into my mind. Long time since I've heard from you. Even Rula and a few others seem to go missing. Hope everyone are well. So glad you are still here. Thanks for the visit, the read and the comment.
Alid
alidzain
8 years 9 months ago
Hi Mark
thanks for the visit, the read and the comment. Sometimes I like to write about nature. Usually my poems are about relationship and stories and experiences. Glad you liked this one.
Alid
jane210660
8 years 9 months ago
Oooh, made the hairs on my
Oooh, made the hairs on my arms stand up.
Very succinct, yet very powerful.
Jx
alidzain
8 years 9 months ago
Thanks, Jane
for the visit, the read and the comment. I'm glad you liked it.
Alid
Esker
8 years 9 months ago
rivers of life
can describe a nation spilling blood
the innocent aged and damned
for ideals or foolhardy lusts of
ambition
the folly of war and nececity
of its change
thank U!
alidzain
8 years 9 months ago
Hi Esker
Thanks for the visit, the read and the comment.
Alid