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C. Wolff
C. Wolff
Jul 22, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Water Nymphs

In waters deep,

I did forgo,

My worldly life,

As they bestowed,

Upon my tender heart,

Their love,

A fond farewell,

To the world above,

So in their arms,

At their behest,

I gave my love,

For eternal rest.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Lured into the deep.

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

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Geezer

Geezer

3 years 2 months ago

As old school...

as any I've heard lately. I love the simple flow and the language fits perfectly! Nothing I could add, would make this better.~ Geezer.
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Jackweb

Jackweb

3 years 2 months ago

I love this piece!

The simplicity is very catchy! I would say, you did a very fine work.

Beautiful!
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S

scribbler

3 years 2 months ago

Hi

I like how you saved the rhyme until the end to give emphasis

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

3 years 2 months ago

Sirens

Just amazing. So many images come to mind. This has been written about and captured in recorded music countless times since before humans wrote stuff down. I love it. Geezer is correct, I would not mess with this, I’d just convolute it.

Really impressed,
Tim