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Sep 12, 2013
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We are
What we want to be
a follower
one to be followed
or
to enact the worlds' horror
and
sorrow
one to conceal
or else reveal
the summer’s cool breeze,
as it slaps across one's cheek
don’t be weak,
the world is vast
7.5 billion strong
what are you and I
but bubbles going along
ere we burst this moment
or
when God has his vibrator sent
and
tells, now is the hour
have your ethereal shower…
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ian.T
11 years 9 months ago
Loved
OK till the vague ref to a God with a vibrator, for many this will fall off the rails.
I am going into my cave and wait for your Sojourn's messenger to pass by with a cleft stick, that has a poem worthy of you in its maw,
Yours Ian.T