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We Laugh Instead
Rewriting Memory
…and how does my family and I deal with trauma?
By making silly jokes of course after the fact
How do I handle a situation and drama?
With some sarcastic humor to remain intact
Along the way I’ve also learned to read the room
It’s been a bit of a challenge with autism
Though sometimes I’ve been off-putting and a weird loon
It’s usually been my coping mechanism
But in those rare times whenever tragedy struck
I’ve been sympathetic, sensitive and kind
And once those broken bones are fully healed up
I’ll bring it up like, “hey, remember that one time…?”
Life is full of surprises – like Greek tragedies
And some will present themselves like allegories
The challenge will be to have some great strategies
So you can later tell those jokes with real stories
Yes, there were a couple of times I fumbled
My quips and gags were bad and a little unhinged
And for the times I learned I was also humbled
Because rewriting some memories makes me cringe
About This Poem
Last Few Words: NaPoWriMo2026 Day 4
Review Request Direction: Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Polished draft
Critiques
Ray Bear
2 months ago
A very powerful
take on using humour as a survival tool . Enjoyed this poem very much. Just a side thought the meter could be tightened in a couple of areas
Wallyroo92
1 week 6 days ago
We Laugh Instead
Thanks Ray,
In the rush to keep up pace with the NaPoWriMo challenge, much of the work submitted is pretty much a rough draft status (submitting a poem per day within a 24 hour window), so yes, I have to go back and tighten up and clean up. Work keeps me busy too so I usually come back to these and refine them a month later. I'm just glad I'm able to catch up on other readings and comments as well.
Ray Bear
1 week 6 days ago
Not a problem
Life's like that sometimes regards Ray
Geezer
2 months ago
I think that...
we all put our foot in our mouths now and then.
Some of us do it a little more frequently than others.
No matter how many times it happens, we are always mortified that our remarks were misconstrued or our perception of the situation were likewise misunderstood. This is a good piece about those times. I would imagine that having Autism is a further challenge.
I agree with Ray Berar and the A.I. that your meter could use a little bit of tightening.
…and how does our family deal with trauma?
By making silly jokes after the fact
How do I handle situations, drama?
With sarcastic humor to remain intact
Along the way I’ve learned to read the room
it’s been a real challenge with autism
Though sometimes I’ve been off-putting, a loon,
it’s usually been my coping mechanism
I would look at those odd lines and rethink of how to present them.
I do believe that a skilled orator could do this by switching some punctuation around and adding some here and there. Your opening line is thought provoking; what prompted the question? It made me feel as though I were eavesdropping, or just randomly overhearing a conversation. ~ Geez.
Wallyroo92
1 week 6 days ago
We Laugh Instead
Thanks Geez,
Yes, trying to write these (while at work, in between breaks) and meeting a bunch of deadlines keeps me a little frazzled. I'm also working on other projects so I don't give the NaPoWriMo pieces as a much care or refinement until after April, but I will come back to them. One thing I am concentrating though is getting back to comments, reading and networking, which I'm glad because I'm getting those much needed tips.
Lavender
1 week 6 days ago
We Laugh Instead
Hello, Wally!
Visiting your Poetry Month challenges...
This is both inspiring, and very humbling. I needed to read this while going through these unsettling time.
Thank you for all your hard work throughout the month. Much like a poetic diary / journal that you've shared within your theme.
L
Wallyroo92
1 week 6 days ago
We Laugh Instead
Dear Lavender,
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment. I'm glad it brought a little levity on a day that you needed it. I'm drawn to pieces with humor and wordplay, I just haven't had much time lately with several projects at the moment. I'm also glad I was able to finish the challenge by working on these themes.
Lavender
1 week 6 days ago
Most welcome!
Enjoyed your talented series!
L
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