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Michael Anthony
Michael Anthony
Jul 26, 2025 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Weight Problem

She asked me what size belt Orion wore
up there among the stars.

I wasn’t certain,
but three stars seemed about right.

But their light is old
so, he may have put on some weight.

We laughed at that
as we sat on our porch,

looking up again at the travels
of the ancient lights.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
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Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 months ago

Orion

Is my favorite constellation, since childhood. my Dad pointed it out to me. So whenever I see it, I think of him! Great poem!

fondly, Cat 

Geezer

Geezer

2 months ago

Yes...

Orion's weight will have changed, but I think he will have lost some, rather than gained. I think there was much more interest in his story than before the advent of television and telephones. A thoughtful look at companionship and the simple pleasures of just being together and wondering about the universe. Such a good feel to this. Thank you for sharing. ~ Geez.

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