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May 23, 2025
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What brought me back
It seems easier for me
to talk about this now,
three years later,
after the chaos,
after the disruption
I experienced.
It appears to most people
who know me
that my mind is clear.
Deep in my soul,
deep in my mind,
I have returned,
but not just to what I was before.
I am a different version of myself.
I am a more confident version of myself.
I am a more active version of myself.
I always understood the value of what I had.
I always valued my beautiful family.
I always appreciated Shaya
and what he did for all of us.
I really did.
After he died
I went to Bruce.
He supported me emotionally
and practically.
He gave me the skills to move onwards
in my new chapter.
His gentle way nudged me forward.
He reminded me to believe in myself,
that I already had the goods to fully function.
I am still in awe of this
and cherish what he achieved every day.
He brought me back.
I am here right now,
at this moment in time,
and loving it.
I am contented.
I am aware.
I am upbeat.
I am in fine form.
I have emerged refreshed.
I have been brought back from the abyss.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Over a period of six months, I have had time to assess how Bruce brought me back to life. Going back further, three years, I have contemplated the clutter I took on and how it affected me. The fact is, I came back, and in a different way.
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
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1 month 2 weeks ago
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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "What brought me back" effectively conveys a journey of personal growth and transformation following a period of chaos and disruption. The imagery of returning to oneself as a different, more confident, and active version is powerful. The progression from acknowledging the past to embracing the present is clear and impactful.
One suggestion for further enhancing the poem is to consider incorporating more specific and vivid sensory details to immerse the reader deeper into the emotional landscape of the speaker's experience. This could help create a more visceral connection with the transformation described in the poem.
Additionally, exploring different poetic devices such as metaphor, symbolism, or rhythm could add layers of complexity and depth to the narrative, enriching the overall impact of the piece.
Overall, "What brought me back" effectively captures a journey of self-discovery and renewal, and further development in sensory details and poetic devices could elevate the poem even more.
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