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WHAT ISN'T THERE
Give me not the wilderness of stars
which sparkle there seductively
for I know how they really are.
They care not for you and me.
Their home is space, sterile and cold
like their spare light when darkness falls
and they're unbelievably old
hidden in between the parsec's walls.
That wilderness of time and space
is no place for heart or mind.
It recognizes not my soul or face;
to sanctity of life it's blind.
All that cold bland emptiness
All that mindless sensory deprivation
All that emptiness
emptiness...
nothingness
just me
About This Poem
Last Few Words: A sample of poetry which wound up being morphing....it just wound up that way
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
lovedly
4 years 1 month ago
wilderness oblivion and timelessness sans ere 'em......~~~~~
are words used by me often
stan
glad you do use
em freely
they belong to
the thesaurus
not exclusively
me only
you know how jess would have kicked me
for such egoistic poetry
but now Gee will
just wait and sea
scribbler
4 years 1 month ago
Well
I almost asked your permission to use those words lol. Thanks for dropping by
lovedly
4 years 1 month ago
ha ha haaaaaaa
lol should be enough
Geezer
4 years 1 month ago
So odd...
that the stars are supposed to be the stuff of life, yet they seem so cold and distant. Much like some people, maybe they are the aliens? Interesting morphology. Hmmmm. ~ Geez.
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lovedly
4 years 1 month ago
Gee
were u ever a biolojist xgx
Geezer
4 years 1 month ago
No...
Not a biologist, but I wanted to be. ~ Geez.
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scribbler
4 years 1 month ago
i kinda started thinking about those Russian cosmonaughts
rumored to have been lost drifting into space and what they must have thought of the new wilderness. And you are right many people are also cold and distant
Geezer
4 years 1 month ago
I hadn't thought...
of them in many years! I too, wonder [if it were true] and if someday, they would be found by another race of beings, drifting through space and wondered about. Would they think that they were just foolish people that had gotten lost or would they think that they were just abandoned? [In the interest of science of course]. ~ Geez.
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scribbler
4 years 1 month ago
i kinda started thinking about those Russian cosmonaughts
rumored to have been lost drifting into space and what they must have thought of the new wilderness. And you are right many people are also cold and distant
Race_9togo
4 years 1 month ago
Stan
Your poetry has gone from strength to strength. You've managed to instill some awe in me.
Thanks man.
scribbler
4 years 1 month ago
Hi Jim
Instilled awe? Well that leaves me speechless
Michael Anthony
4 years 1 month ago
Good stuff Stan! This piece
Good stuff Stan! This piece captured the same feelings I have every time I ponder my own insignificance when I take the time to look up at night - well done!
Best
scribbler
4 years 1 month ago
Hi Michael
I am please this hit a note with you
scribbler
4 years 1 month ago
Hi Mark
Even one such as I stubbles around and pens something good once in a while lol. i guess getting people to think of stuff only remotely related to a poem is a good thing