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jubshaw
May 26, 2020 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

What is Silence?

Silence is snow falling outside your door
Turning the world into seamless white
Covering up all things ugly and impure
Quietly caressing the earth through the night

Silence is a mime telling stories without words
Using only features on his face recorded
He's understood perfectly though his voice isn't heard
By all that see him he's greatly adored

Silence is a window through which one can look
Seeing wondrous things, but not hearing a sound
Silence is also realized in an interesting book
Where exciting stories can always be found

Silence is sitting and thinking your thoughts
No one can know whether they're evil or good
But thoughts make up what your life has wrought
In your silent thoughts, try to think good

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: SC

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Comments

Lavender

Lavender

5 years 1 month ago

Silence

Good morning!
I adore this poem. I can relate to all your descriptions of silence and understand its irreplaceable value. Best line for me '...in an interesting book.' Your final line is good medicine.
Thank you,
Lavender

Geezer

Geezer

5 years 1 month ago

I followed...

the silence and found a riot of sound in my thoughts. Very nice, just one criticism.
How about if you say; 'In your silent thoughts, think if only I could?" ~ Geezer.
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C

c lynn brooks

5 years 1 month ago

silence

your poem describes silence perfectly enjoyable reading

Gracy

Gracy

5 years 1 month ago

I think your title, the

I think your title, the internal meaning and balance are all very good. Deep silence has many meanings, such as not speaking up when one should, or else a silence that's actually loud.
End rhymes are excellent, only one is forced, but that happens sometimes.
I'll return. Enjoyed.