WHAT THE WIND SAID

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:

This poem engages with the wind as a metaphorical voice, inviting reflection on nature’s mysteries and the passage of time. The opening lines effectively personify the wind, setting a contemplative tone that encourages readers to imagine what stories the wind might tell. The imagery of "pirate's sail," "mountains most serene," and "beast's wings never before seen" evokes a sense of adventure and untouched wilderness, which contrasts with the later mention of "humanity's lusty eye," introducing a subtle critique of human impact.

The poem’s rhythm is generally smooth, but some lines could benefit from tighter phrasing to enhance flow. For example, the line "Or say, why on certain days, does it wail, so" feels slightly cumbersome; reordering or trimming could improve its cadence. Additionally, the question "does God ever, ever repent?" introduces a theological dimension that is intriguing but might feel abrupt without further development or integration into the poem’s broader themes.

The concluding stanza introduces a shift in tone, suggesting the wind might withhold its "howling and screaming," choosing silence instead. This is a compelling idea, but the phrase "silent as the dead" is a strong image that could be expanded or nuanced to deepen its impact.

Consider exploring more varied punctuation and line breaks to control pacing and emphasize key moments. Overall, the poem presents rich imagery and thoughtful questions but could be strengthened by refining its rhythm and clarifying thematic connections.

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I really love the personalities you have attached to the wind! these are my favorite lines:

Then again, like some elusive thing
Of all that's born of gloom and grey
It might spare us Truth's doom
Just one more precious day
Yes, the wise wind might choose instead
To keep its howling and screaming.
But nonetheless, silent as the dead!

the poem perfectly matches my mood today!

fondly, Cat

Hello, WB,

I read this aloud a few times - it's so smooth. The mood it shares is introspective, and yet universal. As I read it, I envisioned myself traveling up above, just below the clouds wondering where I was going but knowing it did not really matter. Something bigger than me was carrying me along. 

Beautiful language.

Thank you!

L