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Oct 07, 2015
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WHEN HELL CASTS ITS SHADOW :updated
WHEN HELL CASTS ITS SHADOW
The dawn breaks cloudy and gray
and the hibiscus bows in mourning
to the death of the sun,
A world of desolation
reflects my thoughts
and my heart
and my soul
sink to a fear born
in terrifying loneliness
There is no sun to lighten my way
and carry me through another day
Time pulls me forever forward
and I am too broken to resist
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
10 years ago
this
breaks the heart, Joe.
I especially liked
and the hibiscus bows in mourning
to the death of the sun,
Geremia
10 years ago
thank you, Rula. This is one
thank you, Rula. This is one of my "mood" poems.
joe
lovedly
10 years ago
u make me soften in my stance as always...
Joe...
but still I will say
in UK it's ''grey''
why in USA
it's called ''gray''
I ask of you
as some did say
so that in USA
they can easily take away the'' r''
as we now mostly
''are..''
Geremia
10 years ago
I blame it on spell check :)
I blame it on spell check :)
lovedly
10 years ago
no ..no ,not at all
UK rumour humour tumour
USA RUMOR HUMOR TUMOR
There is NO QS of spell check
Kindly refer google early
wesley snow
9 years 11 months ago
Check your "mood".
There must be something of joy left in your life.
Do you have a link to something of yours (recent) that is happy?
I would very much like to read it.
Geremia
9 years 11 months ago
I am at a stage of Parkinson
I am at a stage of Parkinson's in which the lack of dopamine in the brain doesn't produce the ""joy"" one seeks. My mother died of this disease and since I took c are of her at home, I am familiar with the stages a nd the affect they have , poetry is truth: I cannot write things that are no longer in my life, It would ring false. The ""beauty"" of my poems is that they are born of intense, deep emotions. I also know how I will end. t is not pleasant.
I was thinking that perhaps I should just not write anymore if readers don't look beyond the ""tragedy"" and see themselves,
A forced emotion rings false. This poetry, like ancient Greek tragedy, should have a cathartic effect
You may be missing the ""music"" of my poetry if you look at content alone,
We say in Italian to see the whole you need two eyes. [per vedere tutto, c'ha bisogno di due occhhi]
Siamo tutti nati per morire.
DAMN I''M GOOD!!!:)
joe
wesley snow
9 years 11 months ago
oh I hear the music alright.
And it is all in a minor key. I understand. We have Huntington's in the family. So far I seem to have been skipped, but...
Never stop writing, but I still believe you can find small joys if you perceive them.