when I am gone

About the time I think I've read almost all patterns here you come to prove me wrong lol. "when mind on granite stone dwells on"..........a bit forced having to use on twice in same line. And when you're gone there Will be tears shed, but for those left behind as you'll be in a better place.............stan

A theme that I'm struggling to write about . Well done!
and a perfect last stanza

for dead or quick, down through eons
I will still use the same crayons
pursue my unique rhythmic lick -
my own star's karmic song lyric -
and somewhere I'll see other dawns
don't cry for me

I like the form too ,it is new I would like to try it too.

A very good form of poetry a little past my ways of writing but I love it when others try and succeed.
Stan has said all there is to say about form or the use of no twice and Loved has picked up on the theme, then our dear Rula has come in and spoken, what else is there to say ..Yours Ian.T
.ummmmm I will leave it to my helpers so here is their take on this theme..

There is no need to fret about being lost in that other place you seem to fear, you will be YOU this is not a thing that can change, there is nothing that will ever be Judyanne who talks about ponies and her fears, Judyanne is unique unto herself always...

see you all don't believe

the thrill of knowing that you have been read when alive than dead then who damn will know that some bloody fool has said this was a poet and then through echoes through the soiled wet drains someone may still echo wow you were the one who that did compose and that'll be the turning point we may suppose when the crumpled bones may try to turn a wave on the grounds of the forest they someone years hence may call it as a virgin

quick thought
ere it's converted to poetry...hahahahahaha