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Neopoet Random Challenge 2

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WHEN I AM OLD (challenge contest)

I used to think when I am old
that I will be this or be that
But as blood thins with coming cold
I've worn many a different hat.

So now that I have reached that age
I look back and laugh at young ambitions.
Once in a while I even rage
at the chosen false directions.

The trail behind fades with its length,
The one before me isn't near as long.
So I just hope I have the strength
to sing the ending of my song.

And any hoped for passing fame
I am now content won't come my way.
I'll become a minor extinguished flame
snuffed and discarded in a fray.....

Dare I hope some distant day
one person might recall my words
which I scribbled down while on my way
and not consider them absurd?

About This Poem

Last Few Words: OK another rare one posted straight from hollow head to page lol

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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M

Midge

4 years 2 months ago

Wow!

A great last line - I was surprised by it and even laughed a little.

S

scribbler

4 years 2 months ago

Hi Midge

Always good to see somebody new show up. welcome to neopoet. should you run into problems here just holler. If i can't help I'll do my best to point you to somebody who can. now that last line......There was no other word that popped into mind that rhymed lol

S

scribbler

4 years 2 months ago

Hi Midge

Always good to see somebody new show up. welcome to neopoet. should you run into problems here just holler. If i can't help I'll do my best to point you to somebody who can. now that last line......There was no other word that popped into mind that rhymed lol

Heartfelt

Heartfelt

4 years 2 months ago

turds

I THOUGHT IT WAS AWESOME UNTIL YOU SAID TURDS

Heartfelt

Heartfelt

4 years 2 months ago

turds

I THOUGHT IT WAS AWESOME UNTIL YOU SAID TURDS

S

scribbler

4 years 2 months ago

LOL

As stated this was posted without any edit. BUT one day I'll come back and see if i can improve the ending

M

Midge

4 years 2 months ago

Scribbler...

I am sorry you have spoiled a very funny ending!

lovedly

lovedly

4 years 1 month ago

YOUR TITLE SAYS

WHEN I AM OLD
I was wondering why you said
when
lol
though ur not as old as me yet
stan
nice poem tho

lovedly

lovedly

4 years 1 month ago

Wait then

learn
Pole Vault
while the wait is on
and ur aiming the sky lol stan

lovedly

lovedly

4 years 1 month ago

Be happy

In ALL my life I have never been No 1
except today
another site guy
has placed me as No 1
........... ''poet for this week.........'''
thanks to thee mostly '
Stan
and
NEOS
for all your teachings and blessings