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Aug 14, 2022
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This poem is part of the contest:
Neopoem Of The Week contest August 14 to August 20 2022
When Love Comes
When love comes you see its face,
Through the eyes you want to race,
We come together to love each other,
Like your kids or your mother,
Don't lose faith in what you have,
Things will happen good or bad,
for love we fight to stay together,
never leave now and forever.
About This Poem
Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 10 months ago
Very good
Welcome. Excellent job. It’s structured well, good rhyme. The title is fitting. At first I was going to suggest a change because it’s the opening line but I actually think it’s probably perfect.
Look forward to reading more,
Tim
Jackweb
2 years 10 months ago
Welcome aboard!
This sounds beautiful! I liked the simplicity of the poem. An informative piece indeed! The begining and final cadence was excellent.
You posted this same poem twice. Can still delete one.
Beautifully crafted!
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