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Madderose
Madderose
Jun 24, 2017 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

When planets align.

I rose late to frosty rosy dawn
First low and dark it came
Then your words fell in like
Spring rain, and I was filled
With hope again

One day when aligned
All our planets will collide
Into a beautiful union and
The explosion - seen light years away
Will signal all suns
A new fire has begun

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Hello guys, This is my first poem here...so..just dipping my toe in the water, and getting a feel for how things work. Thanks. Maddy.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Bristol, UK., GBR

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Comments

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

8 years 4 months ago

hello Maddy!

and welcome to Neopoet! it is very nice to meet you. I hope that you will find a home for your poetry here. I like your title, it fits the poem well. it is great to read a love poem that isn't all gushy and mushy. very creative! I love the imagery. I hope to read more of your work in the near future :)

always, Cat

Geezer

Geezer

8 years 4 months ago

Let me add...

my welcome to Neopoet and I will echo Cat, saying that it is nice to see a love poem that is not so full of mush and gush. I too, hope that we will see more of your work. ~ Geezer.
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vandiemenspeak

vandiemenspeak

8 years 4 months ago

Welcome Maddy..

Good first piece! Rosy fingered dawn, a bit frosty, love the contrast with the arrival of rain, you're off to a great start. Welcome.

Take care,

Chris.

vandiemenspeak

vandiemenspeak

8 years 3 months ago

You'll find we are a friendly crowd..

And every time you post, recieve constuctive, supportive criticism - you will grow and devlop as a poet, of originality, I am certain that you already are well on your way.

Take care,

Chris.