Where am I going?

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem's theme is a journey, both physical and metaphysical, which is a classic motif in poetry. The use of celestial imagery, such as the sun, moon, and Pleiades, effectively conveys a sense of vastness and exploration. However, the transition from these cosmic images to the more earthbound "briars, thickets, and thorns" is somewhat abrupt. A smoother transition or a more consistent use of imagery throughout the poem might enhance its overall coherence.

The poem's rhythm could also be improved. The inconsistent syllable count and rhyme scheme make the poem feel disjointed. A more consistent meter and rhyme scheme would make the poem more engaging and easier to read.

The phrase "has vehement pull on me" is somewhat unclear. If the intention is to convey the strong influence or attraction of earthly troubles, a more straightforward phrase might be more effective.

Lastly, the phrase "onward by decree" is ambiguous. If it refers to a divine or cosmic decree, this could be made clearer. If it refers to the speaker's own determination, this could be expressed in a more direct and powerful way.

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understand the use of the word [vehement] to describe the pull of the Earth
on a moth or butterfly as I surely thought you were writing about; [because of the briars and thorns etc].
but then, you used your last word to say that you believed in a god, and that you are sure you will meet loved ones
in the end of this life. I was very confused about the thorns... ~ Geez.
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I like your poem and enjoyed the upbeat tone! Me? I think I have more to learn down on the surface, lol!

*hugs, Cat