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Where do I put

All this feeling?

I long for silence
But,I hate it-
When it's from you.

Where do I put
My heart?
It beats too much.
Like, it's fighting.

But, when it crashes-
Against me,
For you;----
I drown in the pain.
Loving it.
Hating it.

Calm down little heart;--
He is on the way

Calm down little soul;---
Pain is better than oblivion

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Geezer

Geezer

11 months 2 weeks ago

I have no doubt...

that you will find the love that you need, the love that will make you whole.
The music that you write, will carry a tune to the heart of your lover.
I have no doubt that you are destined for a soul full of happiness.
Write on dear heart.
~ Geezer.
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kowque

kowque

11 months 2 weeks ago

I used

Punctuation.

Hope you liked it.

Thank you for the meaningful comment

Geezer

Geezer

11 months 2 weeks ago

Punctuation...

I do appreciate your efforts at punctuation.
I also understand, that it can be frustrating, as it often is hard to comprehend.
I am a native speaker of English, and yet there are times that I do not use it properly.
I will attempt to use it on your poem, to give you my view of how it should look.

Where do I put
All this feeling?

I long for silence
But I hate it-
When it's from you.

Where do I put
My heart?
It beats too much.
Like, it's fighting.

But when it crashes
Against me,
For you; ----
I drown in the pain.
Loving it.
Hating it.

Calm down little heart.
He is on the way.

Calm down little soul,
Pain is better than oblivion.

Your poem is a look at a heart that needs holding. ~ Geez.
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