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Jul 23, 2024
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Where do I put
All this feeling?
I long for silence
But,I hate it-
When it's from you.
Where do I put
My heart?
It beats too much.
Like, it's fighting.
But, when it crashes-
Against me,
For you;----
I drown in the pain.
Loving it.
Hating it.
Calm down little heart;--
He is on the way
Calm down little soul;---
Pain is better than oblivion
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neopoet
11 months 2 weeks ago
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Geezer
11 months 2 weeks ago
I have no doubt...
that you will find the love that you need, the love that will make you whole.
The music that you write, will carry a tune to the heart of your lover.
I have no doubt that you are destined for a soul full of happiness.
Write on dear heart.
~ Geezer.
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kowque
11 months 2 weeks ago
I used
Punctuation.
Hope you liked it.
Thank you for the meaningful comment
Geezer
11 months 2 weeks ago
Punctuation...
I do appreciate your efforts at punctuation.
I also understand, that it can be frustrating, as it often is hard to comprehend.
I am a native speaker of English, and yet there are times that I do not use it properly.
I will attempt to use it on your poem, to give you my view of how it should look.
Where do I put
All this feeling?
I long for silence
But I hate it-
When it's from you.
Where do I put
My heart?
It beats too much.
Like, it's fighting.
But when it crashes
Against me,
For you; ----
I drown in the pain.
Loving it.
Hating it.
Calm down little heart.
He is on the way.
Calm down little soul,
Pain is better than oblivion.
Your poem is a look at a heart that needs holding. ~ Geez.
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