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Geremia

Sep 02, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

WHERE ELEPHANTS GO TO DIE --re post and rewrite

Where Elephants Go to Die

in forests dense and dark
there are places
mysterious
where elephants go
to die alone
for alone is how dying is done.
they never know fear
pass on and mourn their dead
in quiet acquiescence

in a forest deep and dark
of my Mind's invention
something of me is hdden
blind to the fear of ending.
it knows its way to that special place
and waits
in quiet acquiescence

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: USA

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R

13 years 10 months ago

Joe...

is this a re-write of Rhia's workshop poem?...

13 years 10 months ago

No, I wrote ths as the first

No, I wrote ths as the first post when NEO came back. No one seemed interested so I rewrote parts that neeeded some work,

R

13 years 10 months ago

Ok Joe thanks for the

Ok Joe thanks for the clarification...i will come back later and comment..

L

13 years 10 months ago

Graceful

piece of writing Joe. Elephants are one of my favorite animals!

13 years 10 months ago

Thanks, Lenny.

Thanks, Lenny.

13 years 10 months ago

Beautiful Sentiment

That can be appreciated
By those who know your condition
And
If you recall
Yul Bryner also had said

Man is born,
Lives and dies alone.

What a great similarity

13 years 10 months ago

Interesting. That is what we

Interesting. That is what we say in italian

13 years 10 months ago

ru an Italian

i thought you were
from the
UNITED STATES

R

13 years 10 months ago

Joe

i didn't know about that side of elephants as explained in the first stanza of your poem...

i liked the way you have connected it with the "mind & thoughts" in the second stanza ...very well done..

13 years 10 months ago

Thanks. raj/ Elephants have

Thanks. raj/ Elephants have fr the most part a tender heart.

R

13 years 10 months ago

Joe

you are right...if one cares to look in their eyes one can sense how gentle there heart is...which is a stark contrast to their size

13 years 10 months ago

Yes and they have

Yes and they have extraordinary grace in spite of size.

R

13 years 10 months ago

that's true...their gentle

that's true...their gentle gait...stride...the way they lift their trunk is so pleasing to the eyes...

and after reading the information in the first stanza...they are so graceful in their parting too...