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Jul 19, 2024
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Where wild horses run
Where wild horses run
Having fun
Across western sky
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
neopoet
1 year ago
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
This poem, "Where wild horses run," is a short piece that uses simple language and imagery to convey a sense of freedom and movement. However, there are several areas where it could be improved to enhance its overall impact.
1. Imagery: While the image of wild horses running is a powerful one, it could be further developed. The poet could consider adding more descriptive language to paint a more vivid picture of the scene. For example, what do the horses look like? What is the landscape they are running across? How does their movement affect the environment around them?
2. Structure: The poem is very short and lacks a clear structure. While brevity can be effective in poetry, in this case, it might be beneficial to expand the poem to allow for more development of the theme and imagery. This could also allow for the introduction of additional poetic devices such as rhyme, rhythm, or repetition.
3. Theme: The theme of the poem is not fully explored. The idea of wild horses running free could be a metaphor for many things, such as freedom, wildness, or the spirit of the West. The poet could consider developing this theme more fully to give the poem a deeper meaning.
4. Language: The language of the poem is very simple. While this can be effective in some cases, in this poem it might be beneficial to use more varied and complex language to create a more engaging and impactful piece.
In conclusion, while the poem has a strong central image, it could be improved by developing the imagery, structure, theme, and language.
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SuperMary
12 months ago
Thanks for the feedback
Thanks for the feedback
Lavender
12 months ago
Where Wild Horses Run
Hello, SuperMary,
Yes! The sky out west is "big" and vast, endless. Why wouldn't wild horses run free, having a blast? Simple language, thrilling imagery.
Thank you!
L
SuperMary
12 months ago
Thank you for your comment.
Thank you for your comment.
Candlewitch
12 months ago
hello Mary,
stunning imagery. nice to meet you!
*hugs, Cat
SuperMary
12 months ago
Just want to say Thankyou
Thank you for your comment