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scribbler
Aug 22, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

WHIRLWIND'S HARVEST ( an exercise for all)

Hi ya'll. While I'm taking a break I thought I'd give everybody some thing to play with. I'll start the poem. Only 2 rules :1. post only one stanza 2. stanza doesn't need to rhyme but it must have rhythm. So have fun and here goes..............

The stench and ugliness of war
has fertilized too many fields.
Regardless what the fight was for
were lost souls worth the meager yields?..................................................(bet ya'll were expecting a nature poem lol)

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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S

scribbler

13 years 11 months ago

hi Rose

Very good. Not looking for perfect matching, just having some fun seeing where this winds up. Thanks for joining in.............stan

S

scribbler

13 years 11 months ago

hi Rose

To suggest any changes would defeat the purpose of just letting folks have a bit of fun...........stan

Rhiannon1010

Rhiannon1010

13 years 11 months ago

The stench and ugliness of

The stench and ugliness of war
has fertilized too many fields.
Regardless what the fight was for
were lost souls worth the meager yields?

Even in the absence of bloodied bodies
our earth is still soaked in blood.
The bones of many still lay unearthed
each crusade flows red in a ferocity flood

This place has seen violence.
This place has seen death.
Hopelessness and pain,
Things best laid to rest.

(how is this?)

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scribbler

13 years 11 months ago

hi Rhia

This is fine, just for fun so I won't be doing any critique, just sitting back and watching where this goes. thanks for contributing...........stan

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

13 years 11 months ago

Stan

the field of souls from many wars
yeilded much fruits and vegetation, and
the blood of the innocent
cry out for redemption

S

scribbler

13 years 11 months ago

Hi Barbh

Just thought it would be interesting to see where this might lead. Thanks for your participation..........stan

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raj

13 years 11 months ago

Stan

i had said you will not improve...lol..like a ghost lurking in the shadows you keep nudging us..but you have caught me in your ghostly trap....i will surely play this game hahaha...

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scribbler

13 years 11 months ago

lol

The dark scribbler lurking in the shadows, awaiting the unsuspecting poet to wander past so he can pounce and attack with his bent quill ...insert evil laughter here.............stan

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raj

13 years 11 months ago

Stan..

Yes...i am very keen to do it...should be soon...

R

raj

13 years 11 months ago

Stan

stringing a piece to this chain...hope more will follow

The stench and ugliness of war
has fertilized too many fields.
Regardless what the fight was for
were lost souls worth the meager yields?..............(Stan)

Even in the absence of bloodied bodies
our earth is still soaked in blood.
The bones of many still lay unearthed
each crusade flows red in a ferocity flood ..............(Rosina)

This place has seen violence.
This place has seen death.
Hopelessness and pain,
Things best laid to rest. .............................................(Rhia)

How can souls Rest In Peace
though wreaths are laid on coffins
if whirlwinds of bloody wars
keep wrecking cherished lives?..............................(raj))

K

Kailashana2

13 years 11 months ago

There is no rest when love

There is no rest when love isn't the answer
to the question: why does anything exist.at all?
May all beings be free of suffering may all things rest
in awareness from the mouth of love's forever call.

~Ac

S

scribbler

13 years 11 months ago

greetings

thanks for joining in. Maybe you could paste this to the previous one?.........stan

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

13 years 11 months ago

ra j

why did you leave my stanza out. I thinking it just an oversight. add me please :)

R

raj

13 years 11 months ago

Barbara

my apologies for leaving out your stanza...you are right it was through oversight and not intentional...

Rhiannon1010

Rhiannon1010

13 years 11 months ago

This si what we got so far

The stench and ugliness of war
has fertilized too many fields.
Regardless what the fight was for
were lost souls worth the meager yields?........................................................stan

Even in the absence of bloodied bodies
our earth is still soaked in blood.
The bones of many still lay unearthed
each crusade flows red in a ferocity flood..........................................................xena

This place has seen violence.
This place has seen death.
Hopelessness and pain,
Things best laid to rest...........................................................................................rhia

the field of souls from many wars
yeilded much fruits and vegetation, and
the blood of the innocent
cry out for redemption..............................................................................................barbra

How can souls Rest In Peace
though wreaths are laid on coffins
if whirlwinds of bloody wars
keep wrecking cherished lives?.............................................................................raj

There is no rest when love isn't the answer
to the question: why does anything exist.at all?
May all beings be free of suffering may all things rest
in awareness from the mouth of love's forever call............................................kaila

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raj

13 years 11 months ago

Stan

what is this form of poetry you have discovered and got us hooked?...is it "Stringlet"?...

Cheers!

S

scribbler

13 years 11 months ago

Hi raj

Can't take any credit for discovering this idea lol. I think it's called a group poem. First ran across one here , I think seren got one started and I joined in. I hope everybody is enjoying this............stan

K

Kailashana2

13 years 11 months ago

When I went to poetry

When I went to poetry readings in Cleveland, we did a *round robin* . Someone would start a poem and we would each add a line or two.

Always fun & interesting to see where it would go...

~A

S

scribbler

13 years 11 months ago

THAT'S IT!

Round Robin. Could not get the name to surface through my dense skull lol................stan

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raj

13 years 11 months ago

yeah..its fun for sure...

yeah..its fun for sure...

i knew this is called round robin ..i was kidding Stan..lol...