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White Collared
WHITE COLLARED ( one of my personal favourite writes of mine because of the difficulty off the theme and my refusal to back away from it, it was heart wrenching one to pen.
Within the walls of the catholic church
the rape of innocence behind the preachers
altar, holy robes discarded altar boys
sodomized by the righteous absolute
power corrupted by soldiers of God
The victims of the roman collar
implore the clergy to confess
how now to compensate for a
life time of mental torment, the
hopeful lobotomised in youth
decades of hidden truth
Prayers of forgiveness by those who defile
are misdirected, the faithful no longer
rally in droves white robes blackened
by scandal such an unspeakable tangle
of faith and innocence angers my restrain
I struggle to remain tame while confronted
by such hypocrisy that preaches here in front
of me from the same book that would send
his guilty soul to hell, dispelled my belief
a preacher that became a thief, where now to
aim for eternal relief
Antithesis cause and effect
immoral decisions designed
to reflect, fingers pointed
disappointed by them the blessed
be anointed
Burn head in hands failing to
understand, a tourist amongst
the purist, faith that stands in a
broken line
Belief left by faith at the garden
gate of Gethsemane, the ever after
knows thy enemy, suffer little children
who come unto thee
Papal temples laden with faith and fortune
above law and accountability, all within
failing to practice what they preach, a leech
sucking innocence from its prey the children
that we cradle the white collar label fable, swept
under the doctrine table
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
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8 months ago
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Candlewitch
8 months ago
Dearest Ziggy,
How does one recover from this ugliness of scandal? this is a heartbreaking write and you have covered the subject with grace and tact. I applaud your skill! my favorite lines are:
Papal temples laden with faith and fortune
above law and accountability, all within
failing to practice what they preach, a leech
sucking innocence from its prey the children
that we cradle the white collar label fable, swept
under the doctrine table
I hope to see you around the site!
much love, Cat xxx
ziggy
8 months ago
Hi
Many thanks cat delighted to hear from you again
I'm not one for these writing forums these days but
I thought I'd give it a go one last time, kind regards o