White Whispers

after a week
of overcast weather
dark and brooding
like a pensive man
in thought

the blue sky
is a giddy revelation

with boisterous clouds
that no longer hold
melancholy
rain

it is God's optimistic
skywriting

white whispers
of better days

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Maryland, USA

Comments

Rula

6 years 10 months ago

Wow

and what a perfect ending!

Just a small suggestion, I would have reconsidered the line breaks. This is how I read it. The last call is always yours indeed

after a week
of overcast weather
dark and brooding
like a pensive man
in thought
the blue sky
is a giddy revelation
with boisterous clouds
that no longer hold
melancholy
rain

it is God's optimistic
skywriting
white whispers
of better days