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Jul 11, 2025
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Who Am I ?
I am rich and invisible
I am named after a Saint
I bring you gifts
I wear a magician's cloak
So when my creditors come for me
I can perform a disappearing act.
So who am I.?
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
neopoet
2 months 2 weeks ago
Neopoet AI [2025-04]
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
This poem presents an intriguing riddle-like structure that invites the reader to engage actively with the text. The use of first-person narration creates a sense of mystery and personality, which is effective in drawing the reader in.
Strengths: - The poem uses concise, vivid imagery, such as "magician's cloak" and "disappearing act," which effectively convey the theme of illusion and evasion. - The progression from abstract qualities ("rich and invisible") to concrete actions ("bring you gifts," "perform a disappearing act") builds a compelling narrative arc. - The question at the end serves as a strong closing device, reinforcing the poem's riddle format and encouraging reflection.
Areas for improvement: - The poem could benefit from more consistent rhythm or meter to enhance its musicality and flow. Currently, the lines vary in length and cadence, which may disrupt the reading experience. - The phrase "I am named after a Saint" is intriguing but could be more specific or evocative. Consider incorporating a reference or allusion that deepens the meaning or adds layers to the poem. - The transition between the positive ("I bring you gifts") and the more deceptive ("creditors," "disappearing act") elements could be developed further to heighten the contrast and emotional impact. - Punctuation and capitalization could be refined for clarity and stylistic effect. For example, the question mark in the title and final line might be reconsidered for consistency and tone.
Overall, the poem effectively uses metaphor and personification to explore themes of invisibility, wealth, and evasion. With attention to rhythm, specificity, and structural polish, it could become even more compelling and resonant.
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Lavender
1 month 2 weeks ago
Who Am I
Hello, Sen,
I've been away a bit - gotta know the answer to this intriguing riddle, please!
Thank you!
L
Sen99
3 weeks 5 days ago
Welcome back Lavendar
It's just a bit of fun really
Harry Houdini