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Who Lost?...
As Sir Gee rides through the rain slicked alley
He considers the truth of man
There are knights on big white horses
And then there are Killer fans
This knight has won many battles
His armour is dented and worn
The sword he wields is dulled
His gentle heart is torn
The twisted twin of Sir Gee
Stone-cold killer, an empty soul
He slays the evil he finds
To fill his empty bowl
Slaying terrible dragons
Killer; is in his mind
A black knight of steel and darkness
A knight of a different kind
Sir Gee is a spear of light
Rides his charger right into the fray
His waving banner,rallies people's hearts
And sometimes saves the day
But not this time, he's lost this one
Though he gave it all his might
Killer was too strong for him
He lost this one tonight
Sir Gee gives pause to think a while
"The many battles we had"
"We've rid the world of a lot of shit"
"I guess that's not so bad"
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
magics02
14 years 2 months ago
Geez
I went on this ride with you and after reading your story the other day I am totally agreeing with the content and the emotion in this write. You keep up the good work. There was one little trip up here
He lost this one too night
He lost this one tonight
I am glad you are okay. Close call in a crazy world..
Happy Easter Geez
Mona
Geezer
14 years 2 months ago
Yes, Sir Gee lost...
the battle to let it go, and let the authorities take care of it. Killer was too strong for him that night.
Candlewitch
14 years 2 months ago
Dear Sir Gee and Killer,
I'm a great fan of this duo! Killer kicks ass while Sir Gee rights wrongs.
Slaying terrible dragons
Killer; is in his mind
A black knight of steel and darkness
A knight of a different kind
Sir Gee gives pause to think a while
"The many battles we had"
"We've rid the world of a lot of shit"
"I guess that's not so bad"
write on...
love Cat & styx
Geezer
14 years 2 months ago
Again...
thanks for being such a fan of Killer and Sir Gee, they are fans of you and Eddy. We ought to get them all together, when the chats come up again, and have a real free-for-all, against the baddies. Be sure and join us on Chat On The Darkside, when we start up. It will be the first and third Sat. of every mo. from 8pm. - 10pm. EST. Love ya ~ Gee
Xavier Sleuth
3 years 11 months ago
Keeps getting better-
Thal would love the play between these two.
Gotta get her reading it.
Best poem yet.
I've got a feeling
It's gonna keep getting better.
Thx 4 sharing.
This is fun.
Geezer
3 years 11 months ago
I'm thrilled...
that you like Killer and Sir Gee, I haven't seen much of them lately, I think that they are off in Aussieland or someplace, taking out the bad guys. I'm sure that they will show up soon, with a whole new bunch of tales to tell! ~ Geez.
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Xavier Sleuth
3 years 11 months ago
Wow-
Super excited now!
Hope they get back soon.
G'day mate.